Synthetizing Love

Ciao! Ho giocato tipo appena postato, ma sono stata tutte le vacanze senza Internet, poi la procrastinazione ha colpito. 

Per prima cosa, sono davvero contenta tu sia riuscita a pubblicare in tempo! Il risultato è adorabile. ☆

A parte il già citato doppio infodump all'inizio (Ma nulla che un bel taglio non possa sistemare), ti faccio i miei complimenti, se è vero che è il tuo primo approccio alla scrittura di una storia hai decisamente del talento! Come già detto da altri, la seconda parte è molto coinvolgente. Non pensavo sarei stata così presa, mi è piaciuta davvero molto! (๑꒪▿꒪)*

Inizialmente ero un po' triste che Yvonne e Chikara non avessero una route e, confesso, mi chiedevo dove avrebbe portato questa scelta: i personaggi che conosciamo sono loro, questa si suppone sia una storia romantica, ma loro non sono le love interest. Allo stesso tempo, ero un po' stupita di come le uniche scelte fossero durante situazioni quotidiane, e mi chiedevo se non fosse un modo per indirizzare il carattere di Hannah. POI. Poi ho capito - Cioè, almeno, credo di aver capito: le love interest sono le commesse? Se è così, è davvero originale! ... Cioè, per me è originale. Non mi è mai capitata una visual novel che si focalizzasse sull'amicizia e poi andasse nel versante romantico con delle persone normali. È incredibilmente realistico, eppure lo trovo super originale! Forse è questo il motivo per cui risulta così coinvolgente?

(O magari no, magari ho capito male. MA non importa, mi piace lo stesso.) (Se invece ho capito, credo andrei per la barista. La volontaria del gattile sembra la più compatibile con Hannah, la libraia sembra il disagio, ma della barista si intuisce solo che è gentile, quindi andrei da lei perché mi incuriosisce di più-)

Lo scatto di Hannah con il professor Pascal mi ha colta di sorpresa ma, man mano che andava avanti, era evidente che le parole del professore le avessero triggerato un trauma. La sua reazione super aggressiva, una volta capito, era comprensibilissima e tristemente realistica. MA SOPRATTUTTO quant'è bella la scena finale con Yvonne e Chikara? La storia diventa davvero più intensa ed emotiva ogni scena che passa! 

A tal proposito, trovo che la thumbnail sia bellissima. Ha una simbolismo così bello che potresti usarla come title screen! 

Dato che siamo in tema disegno, mi sono piaciuti tantissimo gli occhi - Soprattutto quelli di Yvonne. E Hannah sta molto meglio con i capelli sciolti. Kudos per la maglietta da notte. Personalmente repello la chimica ma, se esistesse, la prenderei subito. 

Ancora i miei complimenti! Per quanto sia curiosissima del seguito, prenditi il tuo tempo e porta la storia che vuoi raccontarci, perché l'inizio è super promettente! 

Ciao! ~ヾ(＾∇＾)

Hmm… It gets good toward the current end, but everything before the final scene when they hang out in her room (which was great!) has sadly a lot of issue with the way the dialog is written. In particular the opening scene on the first day was so bad I was really really close to putting it down altogether – and that just feels so unnecessary. I understand of course that this was made in a crunch during a Game Jam and that improvements will be made if you decide to continue it. I honestly hope for it.

Some observations I collected:

• The infodump on their family backgrounds and childhoods in the opening scene isn’t very interesting and doesn’t seem to add anything to the story. (As @kanity mentioned, if it turns out to be needed it’d be better to just reveal it at that time so that it adds to the story then, rather than making it boring right when getting started.)
• The Chikara in the opening scene doesn’t feel much like the person that is described in the intro or that she seems like later on. With the way she is later on we get a nice trio of friends, with the way she’s in the intro… It feels like she’s taking turns being Hannah or Yvonne I think.
• The way Hannah goes into arguing in the confrontational scene with “Mr. P” it’s like she was a right-wing activist… It’s later revealed where she got those lines from but it felt really off reading through. She just says those things with so much conviction it’s hard to believe that this is the first time she’s arguing about this. I’m honestly not so sure about this anymore now that I read the later reveal, but without rereading it again… It’s like she had those exact lines at the ready for just this moment. She doesn’t stumble when she says those things, argue in circles or contradict herself. It’s just perfectly delivered anti-gay propaganda in an argument that seems like it should have caught her off guard. Gives it a certain hard edge that she obviously (later story) doesn’t have.
• Also in that same scene for the professor, it feels like he wouldn’t just say it like that (even if he was sure) after being so considerate in previous responses before – more likely he would attempt to coat it up in that same considerate tone he used before. (Hannah could then impulsively call him out on it and they’d end up in the same place without changing anything story-wise.)
• Cat is good. Nice details on adding the cat supplies to the room too!
• Her friends and their dynamic together are also really cool towards the end!
• The scene with Laura too… Been subjected to a lesser form of that at some point… Uff…

Was writing down my thoughts as I played!

ART:

First of all, Chikara is so beautiful, can't take my eyes off her even when others are talking xD (that is to say sprites in general are very well drawn ^^) 

UPD: Why the cashier has to be so hot also XD Can we romance her? >:)

I am not sure about the BGs - first one seemed like a stock picture, as well as most of the others, but Hannah's room is so cute and looks hand-drawn and I like it a lot :) 

Also, this game has a lot of CGs! +_+ That's always nice to see, especially knowing how much effort it takes to make them ^^

+Kitty is so cute! <3

OVERALL:

I feel like the first scene has a bit too much information and idle dialogue between the girls (talking about their parents, etc), I wish the beginning of the game was a bit more dynamic, and we learned more info gradually :3 

I like the screen with mobile phone convos, it makes the gameplay more diverse and fresh!

Wow Laura was brutal T_T and she looks perfect amount of creepy on that CG where she says all that churchy-brainwashed stuff >_< 

OK I finished the demo and it seems three new girls we meet are the LIs, my love for Chikara will never be realised :'D

Small issues:

In the first scene there is a CG after "rugged appeal" line, but it appears for a second and then disappears and I haven't figured out how to scroll back or go back through the log :( 

Played this through all the way to the end of the demo, and I wasn't expecting to get so into it at the beginning!!! Though that's not to say the beginning was uninteresting. I really liked Hannah, and Chikara and Yvonne grew on me a lot as the game went on. There's something to her crabbiness that I found really neat, in a way she kinda reminded me of Senku from Dr. Stone weirdly enough lol.

Anyway, the music and the art worked well for this kinda game, but it's the story itself and the dialogue that I really liked. Especially the dialogue. For a while I was cruising through it, enjoying the slice of life elements, but then when I got to the scene with Prof. Pascal and the one afterward, I really got into it. I understood Hannah a lot more after her outburst and confession, and I related to her quite a bit. I'm sure a lot of other people will, too. 

And of course I loved Mr. Hyde. Overall this was a very neat game, and the demo did its job wonderfully, because I'll be very much looking forward to the rest of the game. I'll follow you and wait for it excitedly!!

Thank you for making this. I had a blast :D

Had a really great time playing !!!

The game design is wonderful, the art lovely and in all the game experience great, you did an amazing job.
It took me some time to get into the story but when it became serious and laura appeared it was like a slap on the face ( in a good way ). 

Curious to see more that will happend :D